« Is it time for a brain transplant? | Main | Passive-aggressive fundraising -- just stop it! »

Enough with the meaningless words

The Adcouver Blog has a satisfying little rant called Meaningless Words:


What you offer your customer is way better than everyone else's, isn't it? So why not describe it like it is?
Don't be fluffy. Don't be vague. Tell me something that makes you stand out and causes me to realize that.
Use words like quality, service, and value on their own, and you'll just be another crappy ad.

It's not just crappy ads that suffer from meaningless words. They creep into fundraising all the time. "Quality" is one you'll often find, floating like a smelly algae on the fundraising pond.

Here are some more meaningless phrases that weaken fundraising copy in an envelope near you:


  • Make a difference. A difference only describes a change. Could be good, could be bad. If you must use this phrase, make sure it's clearly and specifically a positive difference.
  • Cutting edge. Puffery. If you have to say so, you aren't.
  • Answers. Unless it's specific answers to actual questions, answers doesn't mean anything.
  • Partner (used as a verb). Another sanctimonious way to avoid content.

All these meaningless words and phrases are used to avoid specificity. Don't do that. If you don't know what you're writing about, find out. If there's really nothing to say -- go make something better. Your donors deserve no less!


Technorati Tag:

TrackBack

TrackBack URL for this entry:
http://www.typepad.com/services/trackback/6a00d83451b8ab69e200d8345e2c3269e2

Listed below are links to weblogs that reference Enough with the meaningless words:

» Choice of Words is a Choice of Worlds from Selfish Giving
The difference between the right word, and the almost right word, is the difference between lightening and the lightening bug. -- Mark Twain Donor Power Blog and Adcouver have declared war on meaningless words and I've enlisted to fight. Nothing [Read More]

Comments

Another word frequently used in the UK in talking to donors, even though many misunderstand it, is the word 'legacy'. Plain English helps and donors understand leaving money to a charity in their will, but legacy confuses.

Bring back plain speech and clear messages.

The comments to this entry are closed.


If you're serious about raising money from donors, you need to get serious about donors. More than ever before, donors are insisting that you share power with them, not treating them like passive ATMs. This blog is about the ways you can do that -- and the rewards that await you and your donors when you do.

Jeff Brooks, creative director at Merkle, has been serving the nonprofit community for nearly 20 years. He wants to be a curmudgeon when he grows up, and considers blogging great training. You can reach him at
<jbrooks [at] merkleinc [dot] com.More
  See this blog's policies.
A great partner for the nonprofit that wants to get donor-powered and grow revenue like crazy!
Subscribe by e-mail

Enter your email address:

Delivered by FeedBurner


AddThis Feed Button

Add to Technorati Favorites